Good ink composition should be focused, detail description of the specific moving. In one survey, many students report: is not clear, even running account, and other issues. I feel the need to describe as a special topic in terms of detail, so the design of the series: When reading, try to figure out Strengthen the exchange of : When reading, try to figure out black cap, wearing a black vest, dark blue Gua, hobble towards the railway side, and slowly leaned down, not disaster. But he crossing the railway platform to climb up there,UGG boots, not easy. He climbs the top with both hands, his legs huddled up; his obese body to the left leaning, showing the effort to look, I saw his back, my tears flow down quickly. son of the father's feelings of love and affection. My father said in the four sentences will also be a taste of the details. How well they go? Always the eyes of a child, a worried child. These few simple words and simple words infinite pity for the father to his son, considerate, affectionate reluctant vividly demonstrated. father is restrained, deep! < br>
details like tea, and can withstand taste, chew, smack aftertaste. students in the step father, Wong .
taste through the details of the students to understand the details of what is not mysterious, but to capture the subtle, allowing people moved by the words and deeds of the moment.
Part II : special training Sometimes we will read the instruction as a reinforcement of teaching writing. But to clear teaching of reading is a way to fulfill the basic sentiment. Dialogue with the text is to find yourself, if you find yourself in reading among the small, useless, that does not matter whether reading, reading for students to find out the sun and moon, given the voice of stone. a dialogue, in this dialogue, the students found themselves open emotional floodgates open to experience and memory storage. so read between the writing, we teachers should do something, not that we have so much taste the details of the description, you write it! From Reading to Writing between, we should guide the resolution of the problem how to write. the writing guide - The Lesson)
simple but not simple
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feel the charm of the details of teaching objectives: 1, understand what is in the details, to develop a concern for and from the Capture the details in life habits.
2, learn to select from a number of useful details of the details and the details of these small delicate vivid characterization.
Teaching heavy and difficult: Target 2
teaching process:
one
situation into our hearts in life, often by some small things and touched by the scene: poor mountain children's eyes full of expectation, awards stage player in the eyes crystal tears, tears, friends,UGG shoes, handing me a small piece of tissue, even in a falling autumn leaves ... ... talk about the life you have touched your heart or those small things scene . Students observe the screen, caused by the mind from the touch screen to find small things or situations. (leads details)
Second, understanding the details of
1, clearly what is in the details. the details, may be a These small things or some of the characters or the demeanor of the minor pieces and other scenery.
2, once again to capture details from the picture, to deepen the understanding of the details.
III Select Details
1, turn: in the earlier photograph of the figure you choose around your emotional point of what details?
such as the performance of their poverty (ragged clothing, behind the poor land, thin body); express their joy (innocent smile, pulling ears and play with each other;) the performance of their strong (can be ragged clothing, behind barren land, thin body, innocent smile, ear pulling each other details such as staggered up to play write).
Summary: Choose a useful
IV depicts the details (in the original photograph of Figure Case)
1, comparative reading:
I saw them smile.
[fragment of a] I see the black in their rosy faces are full of happy smiles.
by comparing clear: the details of characterization requires appropriate amplification. (total)
[fragment II] I see them as plain yellow earth filled with the happy smile on his face. That smile is a spring blooming flowers, bright summer the sun, hanging branches of the pomegranate is the fall.
by comparing the clear: to enlarge the details should be carefully modified. (Students can just add a few sentences)
[fragment c] their simple filled with a happy smile on his face, a smile from them, I felt contempt for their difficulties, life satisfaction, vision for the future.
by comparing the clear: to enlarge the details to integrate into the emotions. < br>
[fragment d] their faces are full of simple and what kind of smile ah! that is described by Golgi storm petrels on the smile, it is described by Van Gogh Sunflowers smile for everyone.
By comparison clear: to expand the association to enlarge the details.
Summary: Zoom a small simple
2, revisit the classic details:
the details of his father to climb the platform I saw him wearing a black cap, wearing a black vest, dark blue Gua, hobble towards the railway side, and slowly leaned down, not disaster. But he crossing the railway platform to climb up there, not easy. He climbs the top with both hands, his legs huddled up; his obese body to the left leaning, showing the effort to look, I saw his back, my tears flow down quickly. Father, like floating on a layer of hair, rain, every fine hair are difficult to lug a few stars and even the small drops, with his father riding the rhythm with a V Wong. Akira rolled his forehead broke it on his forehead for a while to roll filled with soybeans large dew. simple details to enlarge
polished; zoom in on details to be incorporated into emotion; enlarged details of the association to expand
six Lianbi
1, from the following two pictures in Select one to capture the details of your deepest touch, write a paragraph.
2, present their work: whether the other students selected from the useful, is to enlarge the two aspects of small comments.
seven assignments: the description of details of your modifications to a specific background in place, forming a more complete description of the clip details.
Part III: Strengthening commented in
I remember playing an expert to the teaching of writing, a metaphor: the article is that students bring their own, like a baby, pregnant women may bring their own, and our task as teachers doctors, is to help him put this baby to be born, then our job is to : ... ... Content The question now is: In our language courses, teachers can teach students to write the contents of The answer is Reason is content ... ... Language teachers can only play the how well depends largely on the student's understanding and spirituality. then we should also change in the assessment done? second unit to the eighth grade, description of details to describe the image.
father Pan Sunze
back nearly eight years, my father and then less and less, to be honest, the feelings of my father and I built only 5-6 age, when Hou father has not bent back. I like to sleep lying on my father's back, but my mother told me the story in the next, Back then, I think I was the happiest.
Later, the city fathers to go look for a job because his father was the last to the city's middle-aged men, so the situation was awkward farewell. and then, my father rarely smile, also seemed a bit flat on the back of a camel. I always thought his father's back is a natural formation. until 5 years ago, the mother had entrusted to his father work out. 7-year-old father has put me back to the factory, along the way, I feel uncomfortable, in fact, at that time I obviously can walk by myself, can I get back in his father's sense of security, they sleep together, wake up, the father of the factory in a small studio, and out of all these strange uncle, Then my father came in, with his rough hand on my head touched, said: housing, the door open a crack, looked out, and his father are moving goods, then, that I know that my father was a porter, he was standing up the goods, the goods and then hold up his hands, on the shoulder, went inside the warehouse go out after a few minutes, when the father was sweating, but it is very easy, I do not know why I cry, but I quickly wiped the ground, his father had lifted the goods go inside, and suddenly I saw my father in front of a stone, but he seems not to see me and shouted, scene, my tears came again, in the glistening tears, the father came over .........
recent years, with her sister out of school, my father so much older, stooped a lot, my father you are to the whole family involved, I hope you wherever you go!
Liao Rieter
silent in the past, and my father was a taxi driver, every day in When 4 o'clock to get up, disturb us, silent operation began.
at 4:15, and I regularly open my eyes, waiting, I saw a shadow, then, reflected the bathroom weak light shines on my heart, there are shares of a special warmth, I tried to catch the ears, rain black big shoes.
breathing, the tears have soaked the pillow.
now, and my father is no longer driving a taxi, and went to the Taiwan Island, came back a few times a year, I really miss ah! is the first day on the half-time semester final exams, both nervous and excited, the night before the exam, my father came back, when I was asleep,
heard the voice of my father, I woke up, my father came to see me , see I'm still awake, he gave the persimmon gave me, and I very much annoyed eat persimmons, but I put a pillow under the persimmon, the smell of fragrance asleep.
morning, I opened my eyes saw a white, I am wondering what we can see: I hope you get good results! father is in a silent morning, and my father to the silent silent note on my pillow.
I love the morning, I love the early morning silence!
written by these students has been very good, some students may have written unsatisfactory.
an unforgettable things
Huang Mengru (first draft)
everyone has their own distress, sadness, happiness, some memorable things. I give you today to talk about the things I will never forget .
I remember it was only in fourth grade, when that day happens to be Sunday at noon, my mother is cooking for us. burning, burning, my mother down the process of soy sauce, vinegar, said: ! Soy sauce, no how. there waiting for my aunt who find 5 cents, I was watching while waiting for something to eat, after a while child, I said:
far out when I suddenly heard an old woman asked me: , he saw a white-haired grandmother turned to see her familiar face, I suddenly remembered: , you, you ... ... you do not have to go with your son in Guangdong it? how they ... ...? When I saw her, I could not speak, it seems very strange feeling, so I put my grandmotherly Come home, I immediately ran into the room, put down the soy sauce, I gasped: Mother, grandmother came. Mother said: ah! know not? My son still at home waiting for me What are the details? she was at a loss. I asked her: Are you buying soy sauce, or want to write long-lost grandmother to write it? She said: : You and the grandmother were a long time, right? She said: for many years, will soon forget. I said: When you see her, what feelings? She said: I am very moved, very reluctantly. I propose to amend Suggestion: description of details and when they meet the scenes and feelings, respectively.
reunion
Huangmeng Ru (second draft)
everyone has their own distress, sadness, happy, some people more memorable things. I give you today to talk about the things I will never forget.
day, I was on the road, met a gray-haired grandmother, and she called my I shocked the thought: Where as I have. I just brought you up to 3 years old, I ah! To my family, my name is the first grandmother sit in my house, I went upstairs to go get my mother, my mother down and said: course, I went to make tea to the grandmother, when I touch the tea, and found Grandma, her eyes staring at me. I side foam side thought: the. She said to me: , grandmother has told us to go back his mouth. My grandmother can say: moved to shed tears of truth, and I enthusiastically embrace. Soon, the car came, I personally send granny on the bus, and she beckoned, ran home crying.
yellow dream as students revised article, I take it to the classroom exchanges. The views of students: Compared with the previous, centralized selection; article every sentence is a big truth. This is supposed to be people moving, and occasional raise their grandmother grew up, but plain water to O readable. So why make such a good material can not be touched by people? Results of the discussion: the lack of detailed descriptions. After discussion: This paper describe a few details to be careful: If grandma always excited to see; in the tea, the grandmother stared at the . So, I let students practice pieces: these points can choose one to write Lianbi. Five minutes later, to communicate. Lianbi Zhaiji students are as follows:
description of details to send grandma:
walking on the road leading to the station, and we chatted happily, my grandmother's eyes stuck in my body, my heart acid acid. Cars soon arrived, and grandmother to the car. She grabbed my hands, I feel a warm heart, again in bursts. Her eyes red, but also strong with a smile and I say goodbye. I can not help the tears have fallen, Grandma smiled and wiped my tears, to comfort me. I clearly have to see her eyes filled with tears. - Wu comfortable
beginning:
past years will probably fade; Perhaps space will be separated from each other; maybe fate will be to each other and tied together. The greatest joy in life than the joy of reunion. Jiaoren unexpected reunion really pleasantly surprised. - End child shadows
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life is full of vicissitudes, as my grandmother and me. Old grandmother, gray hair on the temples, and I was grown up, sensible. As this meet was rushed, hurried departure is rushing between the cries of parting from the excited to meet so I am full of attachment. I also understand that
description of details reunion Grandma:
day, on the road to see a gray-haired, wrinkled grandmother. Saw her, I had a homey feeling. If she is my family, and has cut right through debt. My mind full of doubt,UGGs, I know you with her? If you saw them. When I think about these issues, my grandmother called out: Hand touched my face from time to time, as if parting years of family reunion again. I still doubt,
the family, can not help but feel. Coincidentally, both of us hugged each other and wipe each other's tears. Later, I brought her home. - Pei Love Grandma
reunion description of details:
I looked back, a full head of white hair, his face Cangsang grandmother waved me forward, how familiar face, but do not know where to seen. I politely said: smell, feel extremely fortunate in mind. - Chen Audi
detailed descriptions of the fragments through the exercises, the students understand the details of the description well, the article will make people feel flesh and blood, and feeling the flow.
I have to write a description of the relevant details to the Huangmeng Ru, will let her own feelings with the third draft will be writing this article.
Huangmeng Ru (third draft)
past years will probably fade; Perhaps space will be separated from each other; maybe fate will be to each other and tied together. Life, a long-awaited reunion, unexpectedly, it makes overjoyed.
day, I go on the road. Ru ears dream, the dream behind Ru ...... I heard a hoarse cry. Looked back, a gray-haired grandmother waving me forward. This face, very familiar, a kind and warm feeling, but can not remember ever seen her. Before I could respond to what the grandmother said: Dream Ru, really is you! I just afraid not! Spoke to tears by. I am a little surprised. Granny, are you? I raise you three years of it, you forget that? I was shocked, after all these years, emerges a period of past memories, I cried: Grandma! Threw herself into her arms, hugging, smelling the familiar smell of her grandmother who, heart very happy ... ...
I held my grandmother came home. Mother saw my grandmother, was surprised and said: how do you come. Quick sit, you're welcome! Said busy to cook a. I am happy to Grandma smiled, for her tea. Grandma's eyes had not been away from me. Make sense of warmth in my heart even more enthusiasm. I picked up my tea, my grandmother stood up hastily, hurriedly came up to me a few steps, the mouth kept repeating: be careful ah! My eyes have some acid. Grandma, rest assured, you sit! I gave my grandmother a reassuring smile, I want to take care of her, my grandmother cried, we just sat chatting. Perhaps not very good tea to drink,
but we enjoyed each other for their happiness ... ...
time, perhaps this way, slipping away ... ...
We send our grandmothers to the station ... ...
I pull the grandmother's hand tighter and tighter. Deliberately slow down the pace. Noon of the station, people shouted clamor, I looked at my grandmother's white hair, unknowingly tears break through the boundaries, wanton slide. I'm afraid never see her, the kind, love me, I was reluctant to let her grandmother's hand ... ... to recall past events, memories have been hazy, but the kind of warm, hard to forget. Grandma and I, as a ... ... She smiled, and with trembling hands touched my hair. Do not cry, Grandma will see you. Grandma's eyes filled with tears ... ... we embraced, is parting share. Car drove slowly forward and began sight ... ...
Life is full of vicissitudes, as I and grandma, grandmother old, gray hair on the temples, and I was grown up, sensible. Encounter is the rush, hurried departure is full of attachment ... ...
reunion
Hu Jing
years may make friendship fade; Perhaps space will be separated from each other; perhaps the fate of red string but can be in a big crowd into each other and fastened together. The greatest joy in life than the joy of reunion. Unexpected reunion is painfully forget ......
dream Ru, Ru dream ...... When I walk on the way home when he heard behind him a burst of hoarse and familiar call. I turned my head: a silver-haired grandmother waved toward me, her face covered with the signs of aging flush with emotion, wrinkled lips tremble to calling my name. A feeling of deja vu as the flood swept over my heart. Who is she? Why do I seem to have a very long time and she knew the feeling? Mind is wondering, the old woman had approached me and pulled my hand: Dream Ru ah, respectively, for so many years, we can actually In the second meet, nice, nice ah! I try to look for in my mind about the grandmother's memory. Look at me looked confused, grandmother said: do not remember? I raise you to the 3-year-old grandmotherly it! Ah, you ... ... I ... ... quickly, go I Jia Zuozuo! By the grandmother of a speaking, the familiar memory like a black and white video playback in my mind like.
I was just taking my grandmother to the house, my mother hurried to cook a few dishes to do, and I hasten to make tea. When I make tea, I found my grandmother's eyes have been upon my body, my heart feel warm. Doraemon ten years, I finally brought together in the fate reunited with his grandmother, what could have been more unforgettable of it?
Noon stations, bustling crowd. I looked at my grandmother's silver, can not help but tears filled her eyes. In the glistening tears, the grandma is still bright eyes staring at me, her hands tightly covered my hand, I know this not very likely never see grandma. After I embraced with her grandmother, grandmother got on, I covered his mouth with his left hand, right hand waving to her grandmother, tears like a broken string of pearls over the cheek, then dropped down to the station ... ...
fleeting,UGG boots cheap, Yan had no trace. When I grow up a little bit when my grandmother was growing old. I understand that: all good things come to an end, this separation means that the next reunion. But when will meet again at the moment parting it?
I thought: This marking should be on some different levels of students will be inspired, and in Grade Two, students like Huang Mengru level of the first draft of the students, the class is likely to be 5-6, as the first Second, the level of the students is issued no less than about 10, then the description of details as well the students have also many opportunities for a Lianbi and give insight to help slower students. Of course, the student's writing is also somewhat immature, but we are not demanding, the students were able to write to it is not easy, ah! We should appreciate is.
for teaching writing, I think I should overcome two thoughts: First, ; second, We should be sensitive to students, with a patient.
Finally, I use words to sum up Tagore composition teaching: Not hammer strokes, but the singing and dancing water, the pebbles into perfection.
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